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Day
Warm and orange sky,
Scent of rain and blue puddles,
Epiphany dream.
Literature
Halloweenentines Day
Love in the air
Hearts everywhere
A sound behind you do you dare?
Turn your head and look back there?
Romantic date
You stayed out late.
Everything was going great
But there it is again that grate
Scraping sound
Is all around
Ghostly shadows do abound
Look for help but none is found
Passion burning
longing yearning
Something that you should be learning
A holy man should do a turning
Sight unseen
It's dark and mean
Wishing it all was a dream
You fell in love... On Halloween???
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looking into the day
take me to the waking morning where the sun dusts the city lights and the river runs to the end of the seashore, diving waves climb on the white trails of planes in the air, travel the oceans and seas sing songs as shaman prayers and dance as the high priestess i see you disappear in the clouds of utopia maybe you’ll never come back the moon will eat the light of night and numb the sleep in the eyes crawl in the drought of forgiving and flee for the danger of fire the greatness of godesses forever pure- ©gilly20170621
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I thought up a new character today in preparation for a role play, and I have to say I really like him so far. He's so intriguing, and, yes, I know that sounds weird, but it takes me awhile to get to know my own characters. Anyway, I'm not sure how much I'll write with him, but this begged to be done. I know it is very vague; that's how I wanted it to be. I think I will enter it in the contest I'm writing for, but I'm kind of afraid the judges might search it up on the net to see if I plagiarized and then see it on here and think I did. But, anyway, critiques would be really helpful since I'm entering this in a contest. The deadline is the 30th of this month, April, so it would be nice if I could make any revisions before then.
For the Live-Love-Write writing prompt.
For the Live-Love-Write writing prompt.
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The technique as always in your writing is amazing, all the little details, comparisons and descriptions. It makes it very easy to imagine and very clear so of course that's done well <img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/s/s…" width="15" height="15" alt="" title=" (Smile)"/>
I've seen this kind of concept before of course that's not new, it's all a basis on how you tackle it and I think you accomplish that pretty well with a mix of intrigue, paranormal, and horror elements. The way Karak tricks his victim into opening up the door is a little chilling in its patience and in being how most people would likely deal with an annoying bird to try to shoo it away.
I think the only thing I wish was for a clearer look into Karak's head but in this case it's I think a good thing, it leaves us with more questions than answers and so it stays with you a little bit longer as you think about it :3 Overall I liked the piece <img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/s/s…" width="15" height="15" alt="" title=" (Smile)"/>